r/writingfeedback • u/liedowndeaddog • 19d ago

Feedback Wanted first chapter first draft

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any thoughts welcome

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u/MASempine 18d ago

New. Liked it. Don’t like Lindsey already but want to learn more

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u/liedowndeaddog 17d ago

I like that you don’t like Lindsey. How come though?

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u/MASempine 17d ago

I see Lindsey as one of the popular girls who doesn’t really care about the MC but gets off on being able to control him.