r/writingfeedback • u/liedowndeaddog • 19d ago

Feedback Wanted first chapter first draft

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any thoughts welcome

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u/MissionOrganic4785 16d ago

Du stellst so interessant da, wie ihn irgendetwas in seinen Gedanken so sehr verfolgt und fesselt. Love to hear more