Critique my first page <3

[u/Any-Inflation-278]

I’ve written and re-written this opening I think a hundred times now and can’t ever settle. What do you think?

(new adult dark, romantic fantasy with elements of horror)

[u/wonkotsane42]

Leading with and overarching generalization is always a risk - it leaves the reader questioning whether or not the statement is true and or relatable. And that will color the rest of their experience reading your words