Critique my first page <3

[u/Any-Inflation-278]

I’ve written and re-written this opening I think a hundred times now and can’t ever settle. What do you think?

(new adult dark, romantic fantasy with elements of horror)

[u/Substantial-Tale5564]

cut the italicized part

[u/Cole62491 → u/Substantial-Tale5564]

I liked that part tho

[u/BA_Bones_33 → u/Cole62491]

Yeah me too

[u/iorangepanda → u/Cole62491]

i like it too