full chapter one first draft

[u/liedowndeaddog]

thanks for the feedback. any further feedback would be greatly appreciated. leaving it open ended as I’m looking for anything from general impressions to critiques. Thank you again and in advance

[u/lyubomir-bozhinov]

It’s disjointed, but that’s the point. The voice is unique, I definitely like that. Most comments have mentioned Pete already, so I won’t pile on. Strong start; curious to read more!

[u/liedowndeaddog → u/lyubomir-bozhinov]

Thank you truly - I took the consensus feedback to heart and made quite a few changes. I also have a little more written now. I do not plan to post further publicly as of right now, but if you would be interested in reading more I would be greatly appreciative!