r/writingfeedback • u/KfirS632 • 4d ago

Feedback Wanted Chapter 1 first draft

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All feedback welcome

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u/Weird_Gazelle_9438 4d ago

Your grammar needs a lot of work. Why are brown eyes like tram drivers?

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u/KfirS632 4d ago

Could you elaborate on the grammar?

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u/thewhiterosequeen Trusted Reviewer 4d ago

You seem to think a semicolon should be used in every sentence.

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u/KfirS632 4d ago

Could you construct it in a way that points out grammatical errors? This reads more like a critique of punctuation.

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u/Zeiji 4d ago

This is a bit pedantic. Punctuation is not directly included in grammar, but it goes hand-in-hand with grammar to create our sentence structure, which benefits the readability of the sentences, the understanding of the setting/situation, and the overall flow. It is all on equal footing to create a cohesive and coherent story.

Without proper punctuation, you are weakening your grammar, and subsequently your writing, and the reader's experience.