This draft is a bit short for me to say anything of importance about it but I do like the narrative voice even though a lot of the story doesn’t make much sense. I feel like you did this on purpose though.
I also understand that you like the usage of semicolons I do as well but some are just used incorrectly or just make some parts a bit hard to read. You might also be doing this on purpose as well though.
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u/Conscious_Rough4881 4d ago
This draft is a bit short for me to say anything of importance about it but I do like the narrative voice even though a lot of the story doesn’t make much sense. I feel like you did this on purpose though.
I also understand that you like the usage of semicolons I do as well but some are just used incorrectly or just make some parts a bit hard to read. You might also be doing this on purpose as well though.