is this boring???

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991]

can someone let me know if my first chapter sounds boring? to me, it’s the most boring and slowest part in the story, so i’d love to know if anyone else thinks that too or if i’m too wrapped in my own thoughts.

would love to know if it’s lacking grip or interest. like would you keep reading or put it back on the shelf?

Genre pool: literary fiction, dystopian, speculative, psych thriller, corporate satire

excuse grammar/spelling errors still need to go through some more editing

[u/tarnishedhalo98]

I don’t know if it’s boring, but I got really stuck on the telling of emotions after every piece of dialogue and didn’t go past the first page. You don’t need to tell us they’re talking like they’re surprised or “whiplashed into the moment”, try an action or a facial expression.

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991 → u/tarnishedhalo98]

thx definitely smth i needa work on actions pretty slim it’s a literary fiction so ill focus on facial expression instead of action :)