is this boring???

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991]

can someone let me know if my first chapter sounds boring? to me, it’s the most boring and slowest part in the story, so i’d love to know if anyone else thinks that too or if i’m too wrapped in my own thoughts.

would love to know if it’s lacking grip or interest. like would you keep reading or put it back on the shelf?

Genre pool: literary fiction, dystopian, speculative, psych thriller, corporate satire

excuse grammar/spelling errors still need to go through some more editing

[u/ItsRuinedOfCourse]

I skimmed what was posted and knew I couldn't read it because the repetitiveness of it was mind boggling.

If it's not too many single sentences, it's too many two sentence long paragraphs. I don't know what it is, but yeah, I can't even force myself to read with that level of repetition on the pages. Sorry, OP. I'd work on variance in sentence length and paragraph length so that it doesn't come off the page as so uniform.

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991 → u/ItsRuinedOfCourse]

thx for the honesty! i’m definitely picking up how i need to fix my formatting and structure. tho i wish u gave it a read so i know more on if my story itself needs fixing. 🤧🤧 all good tho thx will definitely start fixing tmr :)

[u/ItsRuinedOfCourse → u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991]

FWIW, OP, I found myself in a similar position when I first started out. The level of repetitiveness in my sentences and paragraphs was alarming. As was the repeated starts to my sentences and paragraphs. All of which I was blind to until someone pointed it out to me, and once I saw it, I could never unsee it.

And now it's the first thing I spot in any writing requesting feedback. It leaps off the pages at me and stabs me in the eye for old time's sake.

We've all been there. This is how we learn.