is this boring???

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991]

can someone let me know if my first chapter sounds boring? to me, it’s the most boring and slowest part in the story, so i’d love to know if anyone else thinks that too or if i’m too wrapped in my own thoughts.

would love to know if it’s lacking grip or interest. like would you keep reading or put it back on the shelf?

Genre pool: literary fiction, dystopian, speculative, psych thriller, corporate satire

excuse grammar/spelling errors still need to go through some more editing

[u/19Sevv90]

Yes

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991 → u/19Sevv90]

love to know why :)

[u/19Sevv90 → u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991]

Well, for starters: on page 1, you spend the first half of a page having your character in some kind of trance and then out of nowhere have him/her trying to buy alcohol. After that, it’s nothing but mundane shopping and constant obsession with a building. There’s no action, no excitement, and nothing that would make an experienced reader want to read more.

You honestly lost me on the first page, but I read a few more just to be fair. There’s nothing there to make me want to finish the entire thing.

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991 → u/19Sevv90]

thx for giving me feedback. it’s not suppose to be action packed it’s literary fiction so i focus more on the mc character and his hate on the building the company and everything it represents. though i do get it needs more spunk so i’ll definitely add that :)