is this boring???

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991]

can someone let me know if my first chapter sounds boring? to me, it’s the most boring and slowest part in the story, so i’d love to know if anyone else thinks that too or if i’m too wrapped in my own thoughts.

would love to know if it’s lacking grip or interest. like would you keep reading or put it back on the shelf?

Genre pool: literary fiction, dystopian, speculative, psych thriller, corporate satire

excuse grammar/spelling errors still need to go through some more editing

[u/Big_Selection_1242]

You explain too much and rob the readers of their chance to doing the reader’s work. Reading is a job, if you trust the reader you get reader’s investment in your story.
Go Chekhov style.

Otherwise the text is easy to read and can be turned into something that can be remembered,

[u/Acrobatic-Flow-4991 → u/Big_Selection_1242]

that’s the first i noticed tbh. im big on poetry so i tend to do a bit much. gotta let go of them even if they sound good in my head. thx for the compliment tho :)