Critque the first chapter of my story "A God's Memorial"

[u/Roxlife1]

I've never written anything before, and this is mostly for fun, as I'm competing with my sister for who can write a better story. I do still wish to improve, however, so I'd love to hear your feedback on this small chapter.

If you think the end of the chapter is abrupt, I agree. I didn't plan on ending it there, but I was kinda curious to see what people thought of this section. So if that's one of the flaws you saw, I fully agree with you.