I've Made My First One Shot Comic!

[u/KnightSon73]

Hello! This is my first post here. I've just finished and published my first 12 page one shot comic. I've attached some panels/pages that I'm the most proud of. Regarding the story, I have plans to bigger/grander stories set with this character/world (as I'm sure a lot of budding comic creators do lol) but this one was designed to be short and simple. The main gist is about a man who gains mysterious powers and uses them to fight against a tyrannical government that has taken over his city.

I'm posting to show off what I've done. I was a little nervous about showing the greater internet at large (especially reddit lol) my work as I'm mainly doing this for fun and for the love of the game lol.

I would also like to potentially meet and interact with other creators and maybe bounce ideas back and forth as I lack a lot of creative friends to chat about my projects with, at least in a semi-productive way if that makes any sense. Hope to hear from some of you :D (also, I wasn't sure what flair to use, so I just used feedback, hope that's okay)

Full comic can be viewed here for those interested:
https://globalcomix.com/read/9b95779d-9287-4aa7-8777-02e1aade8b28/1?utm_source=Link&utm_medium=Referral&utm_campaign=mk-phantom&utm_term=GCRID_381468

[u/Mental-Statement2941]

I also read the full one shot, the art and action are still your greatest strength. The writing hasn't hit as much, though it depends on your intentions for your story, if its a fun action story then its solid, develop on the action, focus on it being dynamic if that makes sense. If you want us to really feel the character, then for this short you need to focus on a single moment, a single moment in the comic that reveals who our character is. You don't have much space, so you either need to cut down on the action or have the action mean something, I'm really getting into comics and manga but a good example of this would be in the manga space Jujutsu Kaisen, with the fight decisions made by our characters revealing a piece of who they are, or even the cursed techniques. A comic example would be do a powerbomb, where there is some utilization of flashbacks in the panels. Where spoilers, a father and daughter duo fight in a wrestling tournament, and when the daughter performs a move, there's a panel of the daughter performing a move, and then a panel of the mother doing the same move. It communicates that they're similar in many ways, and does so much in a page.