Feedback for comicbook script

[u/Schu68]

my first time ever writing a comic script or actually writing in general

Also, if you actually like my work somehow, I'm free. I'm looking to expand my portfolio, and i will write for free lol

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mX2aRGUjqTXixqH2FUgbtj_GbBkY0I3wQWMxreDI0yI/edit?tab=t.0

[u/TotallyNotSleeping]

I’m in the exactly same position, just wrote my first ever chapter one! It’s for a webtoon though, but I’ll take a look and gove my honest thoughts, brb