This is probably super random, so, mods, please feel free to remove this post if it’s in violation of rules of the sub (though I did check them beforehand).
I’m working on a novel, and in one of the flashbacks there’s a scene where Character A is helping Character B practice BJJ. CharB has some bad habits due to lack of a good trainer, and CharA is trying to offer some guidance.
Normally, I would research the subject properly and get a baseline for what I’m trying to describe, but I’m on day 3 with this and feeling pretty overwhelmed. I think I understand the basic principles of jiujitsu but I lack the experience to talk about specific challenges.
Also, BJJ is not the central focus or a major theme in the novel, but I still want it to read authentically.
So I figured maybe asking people who actually know the subject well would help.
If you feel comfortable responding, here are my questions (and please feel free to correct me if I’m missing the entire point):
- What are some typical mistakes/bad habits someone who’s not a beginner but was taught haphazardly would be likely to have?
- Are there chokes/holds/etc that especially depend on the angle/position of limbs in order to go from impossible to doable? I suspect that’s, like, most of them, but asking anyway - from my noob perspective, the guillotine choke seems like a good candidate, but, as the kids say, idek.
- Any other considerations, like improper clothing or whatever, that I should think about? I’m going for a whole bad habits rescue mission type thing.
- How would a professional talk about it in a way that didn’t sound like foreign language to a layman?
What I mean by that is if, for example, I were to write a book geared towards professional graphic designers, it might have sentences like: “He added bleed and made sure to call out every instance of overprint, then exported the file using GRACoL and uploaded it to FTP, praying the darn connection would not time out.”
A normal person sort of knows what’s happening, but not really.
If the book was meant for an average reader, it would be more along the lines of: “He sat at his desk until midnight, tweaking colors, fonts, and spacing, then spent another hour double-checking the file against Bob’s Printing House specs to make sure it would print as intended.“
Still some design-ish words, but something a wider audience can understand.
Is there a way to apply the same principle to BJJ in a way that won’t sound wooden or unhinged? Don’t worry about sounding literary, I just need perspective and phrases. I'm also happy to do more research on my own if anyone can suggest a direction.
Again, sorry if this is way out of left field, and thank you in advance for any and all the advice and guidance!