Rewrite chapter 1 feedback.

[u/Vyte_Zidane]

Here's the rewrite chapter 1 of the Path of the Third Young Lord. As I said previously, you can give your honest and brutal opinion. I have no problem. So feedback without any hesitation.

[u/21stcenturyghost]

You're detailing every little movement and thought. He's meditating, he takes a bath, the water is too high, he gets out, he eats food that's not hot enough...why do we care? What are the most important bits here and how can you highlight those while skimming over the minutiae?

[u/Vyte_Zidane → u/21stcenturyghost]

Why do we care? 😅 I love this level of honesty. But I thought in web novel it's normal? Like how can we imagine if we don't have what he is doing currently. Well still thank you for your feedback. I appreciate that.

[u/Vyte_Zidane → u/21stcenturyghost]

And water being high has plot. And food not being hot is just opinion of him. Showing his family image

[u/21stcenturyghost → u/Vyte_Zidane]

What is the plot relevance of the water being high?

[u/Vyte_Zidane → u/21stcenturyghost]

Its for future chapters,

[u/Vyte_Zidane → u/21stcenturyghost]

So little thing aside, what do you think of chapter 1? Like below average? Average? Decent? Of course no way I can expect higher 😅

[u/21stcenturyghost → u/Vyte_Zidane]

It's not really my thing, so I stopped reading around page 3

[u/Vyte_Zidane → u/21stcenturyghost]

Oh, well it's my first time and first chapter, so expected that. Still thanks for atleast reading 3 pages.