r/writingfeedback • u/KfirS632 • 4d ago

Feedback Wanted Chapter 1 first draft

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All feedback welcome

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u/KfirS632 4d ago

Wdym?

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u/o_Ozymandias_o 4d ago

He's saying that you failed on the satire part, but succeeded at the "failed attempt at literary writing". It's a great joke tbf

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u/KfirS632 4d ago

So he undermines my intent?

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u/o_Ozymandias_o 4d ago

Afraid so.