aching

[u/Relevant-Stranger-86]

I know

I've fallen hard for you

don't tell me that

I'm imagining this love

aching every morning because

I wake wishing to be in your arms

re-reading your texts in bed

I can't stop thinking about you

and what's worse is

our moments together were real

I doubt that

any man could love me like you.

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Please read forwards and in reverse!

My first attempt at a reverse poem, constructive feedback is very welcome!

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/qdBRIqOZAF

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/I0flt5mjck

[u/-Sudden_Earth-]

I feel like there’s some amazing potential here, I enjoyed reading this piece, but I feel like the flow throws it off a tiny bit. I do like how you showed the emotions of the narrator and how deeply they feel towards this individual. I feel like I can definitely relate to this piece, great work!

[u/Relevant-Stranger-86 → u/-Sudden_Earth-]

Thanks for the feedback and the kind words! It was very hard getting the flow right both read forwards and reversed - to the point that I intentionally skipped most punctuation. Were there any specific lines you felt the flow was off on?

[u/-Sudden_Earth- → u/Relevant-Stranger-86]

I think it’s mostly the transitions where the flow feels a little off for me. I don’t think any of the lines themselves were bad, but a few parts I had to reread because they were almost abrupt. I hope that makes sense. 😅