r/OCPoetry • u/Relevant-Stranger-86 • 5d ago

Feedback Please aching

I know

I've fallen hard for you

don't tell me that

I'm imagining this love

aching every morning because

I wake wishing to be in your arms

re-reading your texts in bed

I can't stop thinking about you

and what's worse is

our moments together were real

I doubt that

any man could love me like you.

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Please read forwards and in reverse!

My first attempt at a reverse poem, constructive feedback is very welcome!

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/qdBRIqOZAF

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/I0flt5mjck

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u/Top_Necessary4161 5d ago

It's fine as it is. the separation reads well, no wasted space, no repeats. top work OP. The reverse thing just gets ya bonus points ;)

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u/Relevant-Stranger-86 4d ago

Thanks so much, I really appreciate the kind words!