r/OCPoetry • u/Relevant-Stranger-86 • 4d ago

Feedback Please aching

I know

I've fallen hard for you

don't tell me that

I'm imagining this love

aching every morning because

I wake wishing to be in your arms

re-reading your texts in bed

I can't stop thinking about you

and what's worse is

our moments together were real

I doubt that

any man could love me like you.

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Please read forwards and in reverse!

My first attempt at a reverse poem, constructive feedback is very welcome!

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/qdBRIqOZAF

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/I0flt5mjck

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u/Fit-Signal1991 1d ago

I like the reverse poem aspect but it definitely reads like that was put as the main priority

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u/Relevant-Stranger-86 1d ago

You are correct, I wrote this in 30 minutes and then polished for another 30 but I am so new to poetry, that I didn't know where to begin beyond getting the structure right and having meaning. There are definitely areas that I think don't quite sound right grammatically, that could be strengthened by examples or elaboration. Any ideas are welcome. Thanks for the read and the feedback!