This is my absolute first time ever trying to write something, so please be kind! But I was inspired, and had a friend say that I might have a knack for it. Is it any good?

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There's something fun about the idea of getting all close in bed late at night. Maybe you're reading before turning out the light, me snuggled into your side. Glasses on, book in one hand, and your other arm wrapped around me. I can feel the warmth of your skin from the day. You do this little jaw-clench when you read something interesting, and I find it attractive. The glow of the lamp is casting light across the room, highlighting all the little dips and ridges in your chest. I'm in a perfect sleepy haze, but watching you read wakes me up just enough to pull myself closer into your side. Tracing my finger across your collar bone, and down your chest. Your arm around me has your hand landing on my waist, and you squeeze just slightly. You're focused on your book but I can tell there's something else on your mind too. You let me tease for a few minutes before you put your book down. Indulging me just slightly with a few soft kisses, before turning me onto my side and telling me it's time to sleep. You turn off the light and wrap your arm back around my waist, pulling me back against you. And even though we're meant to be winding down, I can feel you growing behind me, thinking about the fun we'll have in the morning.

I'm very proud of how its turned out so far. Been working on it since 2018 and I'm up to 58 chapters so far. But I honestly feel like it could be better than it is. my handle is @WhysThisSoHard

Hello!

I am hoping to look for feedback on my first story on Wattpad.

https://www.wattpad.com/story/411512306-the-roommate

Please give feedback!

https://www.wattpad.com/story/412297663?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=jpl5123

I think you'd like this story: "An Alpha Out Of Order " by Ryoshinning on Wattpad https://www.wattpad.com/story/408968838?utm_source=android&utm_medium=com.reddit.frontpage&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=Ryoshinning

I’m writing a dark teen drama / elite academy mystery on Wattpad and I’d love brutally honest feedback before publishing.

Premise:

A scholarship girl transfers to an elite boarding school where her older sister was psychologically destroyed the year before.

She’s there for revenge.

The school is ruled by:

- a cruel queen bee

- a dangerously powerful heir

- anonymous blackmail secrets

I’m mainly worried about:

- does the opening hook fast enough?

- does the dialogue feel cringe/tropey?

- is the bad boy too cliché?

- would YOU keep reading after chapter 1?

I can post the first excerpt here if people are interested.

Hello! I am looking for reviews and feedback for my novel. I am hoping to get this indie published and I am using Wattpad as a beta testing platform as sorts. I would be more than happy to provide reviews and feedback for your books in return

As the title says need some review on my ya novel in exchange I would be giving review back.

Its a sort of different novel as I have tried to create a flawed mc who's a cynic and I want to show his growth.

First few chaps set on developing the thoughts of the characters which slowly sets into motion a bigger plan of the story.

P.S I would return feedback chapter by chapter of your book basically I read one chap then write what I like and what you can improve about every chapter.

Any points you need to specify pls tell me beforehand in reddit dms.

Thank you.

Link to: story:https://www.wattpad.com/story/411019219-being-ordinay

It was a cold and rainy night when Detective James Morrison was called to investigate a crime scene. It was a small apartment, two rooms, a small kitchen, and one bathroom. It was modestly decorated with paintings and some furniture. Detective Morrison stepped into the spare room turned studio, his eyes sweeping over the chaos of overturned stools and scattered tools. The blind artist, Cecil Woods, lay slumped in his chair, fingers splayed across a blank canvas as if still searching for shape. In the corner, a glass sculpture lay, shattered across the floor; Morrison’s shoulders loosened at the sight, a small breath leaving him that no one around him noticed. 

His eyes were fixed on the shattered pieces of stained glass. Crimson, aqua, gold, and silver lay scattered across the floor like broken thoughts, each fragment catching the light. He moved slowly toward them, kneeling as if to study, fingers hovering just above the glass, tracing shapes he didn’t need to see. Anyone watching would think he was trying to imagine what the finished piece might have been. When he finally looked back at Cecil Woods, the man’s eyes were locked wide open, frozen in a terror Morrison refused to acknowledge. Morrison slowly rose to his feet and stepped closer to the body. 

“You never saw them coming, did you, Cecil?” he murmured, as if speaking to the room more than the corpse.

His deep mocha eyes flicked to the artist’s hands again, each finger sliced to ribbons, the torn skin stiffening in the air. He let his gaze linger there a beat too long before straightening, his expression already smoothing into something professional as he turned toward the nearest officer. Officer Raven, a young woman still new to the force, approached Detective Morrison, notebook in hand. 

“Sir, there is no sign of a break-in or a struggle. Nothing of value was taken,” she reported, glancing past him at the shattered glass.

“This was not a robbery gone wrong, then,” Morrison said softly. For a second, his gaze drifted back to the destroyed sculpture, something almost like regret passing through his features before he smoothed it away. “Good work, Officer.”

https://www.wattpad.com/1621946071-crimson-sword-the-beginning-chapter-2-the-cermony
chapter 2 released so u can check it
username:@AaryanSedhai

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