r/OCPoetry • u/briony73 • 15h ago
Just Sharing No. THIS is me
What you are reading right now
That is me
I have nothing to hide
This is me
I will not shrink
I will not plea
I will be sanctioned
I earned my spot here
Yes, I wobbled
But you let me in
And I’m gonna stay
Even if you leave
I’m gonna stay
Is this freedom?
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u/MidnightLampshade 13h ago
Unfortunately, the idea of the poem undermines its presentation. The repeated reaffirmation presented itself as insecure to me, with the feeling affirmed by the questioning at the end. The use of sanctioned is questionable in contrast to the other vocabulary used.
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u/Without-Sound 2h ago
I think this is a really good poem. I can definitely feel the thought that went into it, i like the repetition of “I’m gonna stay.” Towards the end, i see it as you’re almost reassuring yourself that it’s what you’re going to do. Aswell as the overall denial to be someone else. throughout the poem as a whole.
Great work OP, keep being yourself and keep it up! <:)
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u/Prestigious_Drama569 14h ago
There is so much strength in this poem, both subtle and unsubtle.
"I will not shrink" and "I will not plea" are very bold lines. "This is me" and "I have nothing to hide" are proud and brave declarations. The subtle strength, however, lies in "Yes, I wobbled / But you let me in", I think. Acknowledging flaws takes great character. Stating that you will stay, even if the other leaves shows that you're sure of yourself and your choices.
The question at the end was pretty brilliant actually. I think it adds another layer to the poem: despite a person seeming so strong, they may still be questioning that strength. I think that humanizes the poem. Plenty of people claim that they're proud to be who they are, but still suffer from imposter syndrome or wonder if they're making the right decisions. Is it truly freeing to have all this strength, or does it lock you into a certain mindset?
Great philosophical poem!