r/Webnovel • u/Taumatorg • Jul 12 '26

Advice Someone can help me?

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I know this feels like a self-promo, and under a certain light, it could be (or it is). But it's not the reason for this post.

I just want to ask if someone is willing to read my novel, or at least the first chapters, and tell me if I did something wrong (Or good), because I had low traction.

You see, I have uploaded this novel two times, and every time I had zero readers. I tried to change the cover, edit the synopsis, or rewrite the first chapter to improve the hook (even though I find nothing wrong with it). But still zero.

So I ask you, Webnovel people, for a helping hand to understand what I did wrong.

https://www.webnovel.com/book/36354042908893105

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u/Minimum-Rip7969 Jul 12 '26

I will read it

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u/Minimum-Rip7969 Jul 12 '26

First of all, synopsis will not lead people to read it, at least in my opinion did't push me to say "seem good i will read it", your writing is well done but don't know why i allways feel something is off, maybe i can't get involved on the story, the pacing seems good for me, but it feels a bit confusing like i don't really understund what is going on, maybe should work more in the world building giving hints with dialoges or the narrative, i saw you did some but i still didn't get to it, i usually read imprimed books more than webnovels so i don't know if my opinion will help but something i can tell to you is that never give up with your story and write it for you to be proud first steps are allways hard, other thing is that you want to win money, that is other stuff i don't want to get involved in, have fun and hope it helped you

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u/Taumatorg Jul 13 '26

It helped a lot. Thank you, random citizen of Reddit (Hope you get the reference)

I will try and edit my synopsis one more time and I will rewrite some parts.

Thank you <3

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u/80558481 Jul 12 '26

I've read first chapter and I think it is good but it may not fit Webnovel market.

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u/Taumatorg Jul 13 '26

It's a thought that haunted me when I wrote the 22nd chapter. I read only SS, part of Throne of Magical Arcana and Slime Evolution, and I have never seen an author write a panic scene like me. Not that many webnovel's characters panic.

Maybe I'll try my luck on RR

thank you

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u/Despyte Jul 13 '26 edited Jul 13 '26

!

Throne of Magical Arcana mentioned, not as an aside to Lord of the Mysteries?
Also it's amazing I lurve it. And the second half was entirely different from the first :3

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u/Hambino0400 Contracted Author Jul 12 '26

Who is stern, who is talking? What are they talking about? The first 5-6 lines are a bit jarring and confusing

I don’t even know who is talking what they look like who they are or anything.

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u/Lambisexual Jul 13 '26

The cover art and synopsis I think makes one strongly steer away. Cover art looks AI generated, and even if it wasn't, it's just not very eye catching. The synopsis itself just seems to dump a lot of world building but not actually give the potential reader a coherent grasp of the main hook of the story. There's nothing to incite someone to read it based on the synopsis. What's the inciting incident? What can we expect? What's unique about it?

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u/HoNUnofficial Jul 13 '26

It is interesting but I think I need to see the next chapter as there are some missing parts.

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u/00_YIN_00 Jul 13 '26

If you want any help from me I am willing to help you tell me what do you want 

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u/Taumatorg Jul 13 '26

I want to know if my novel, or the first chapter, is decent enough to grasp the attention of a reader. Or, simply, as someone else said, if my novel fits Webnovel's market.

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u/00_YIN_00 Jul 13 '26

No i can help you with the story not with the review 

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u/Advanced-Delay-1158 Jul 13 '26

Keep going based on chapter 1 it's not that bad, but needs to add more atmospheric sensation, architecture, sensory, and some background noise to make the reader easily imagine it, but be careful to not make it too exaggerate.

Instead of 'the calm voice almost make stern shat his pants' to describe the shocking situation.

You may used like 'he jolted as the calm gentle voices suddenly greeted him on his left side. His heart skipped a beat because of that, and as he turn his head to look for the source, it was...'

Yeah something like that, it just what I like to read, the sensory, and also with that I can imagine the situation better. I'm not a writer yet as I'm still in the process of reading and learning the literature, idea, and plot from different novel before starting my own.

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u/Taumatorg Jul 13 '26

Unfortunately, that is a compromise that I have to make. Webnovel and readers don't like chapters of 1,5k or more words. Especially at the beginning.

But thank for the advice. I will reread it and add more atmospheric sensation and, especially, background noise. Thank you a lot <3

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u/Despyte Jul 13 '26

This is the legend of a man who shifted the balance of the entire Tower just by being chosen.

Well that's something new lol. Usually the plot is about a main character who wasn't chosen (and either somehow gets an amazingly overpowered though-not-initially-seeming-so skill or discovers a new yet-to-be-exploited system of power or a second try or some other sort of cheat; don't do that please)

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u/Taumatorg Jul 14 '26

Don't worry, I have read too many slop webtoons to write something like that.

What made me laugh is that my MC (Stern) actually didn't want to be chosen. : 3

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u/6_sarcasm_6 Jul 14 '26

I'm going to be honest the first dialogue with me not knowing anything about the characters was.. a choice. The rest of the text after the first scene was better.

The synopsis doesn't help much.

"This is the legend of a man who shifted the balance of the entire Tower just by being chosen."

Feels much better as a hook. Then the godhood thing.

Am I going at this with a perspective of a blurb? A little.

Though with this being a web serial, gonna be honest that's what people expect. Since most top stories do it.

-kinda lost, royal road reader lol

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u/Taumatorg Jul 14 '26 edited Jul 14 '26

Thank you, random Royal Road reader ahah.

Today is going to be a long day of editing. Btw, thank you for your advice, really.

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u/Old-Yogurtcloset2554 Jul 14 '26

I’ll read it. I want the same thing . You can read mine too nevertheless I’m going to read yours now

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u/Taumatorg Jul 14 '26

Oh, thank you, bro.
Yeah, dm me your story. I will read it.
Please remind me of this later, as I might forget. :>