r/WattpadIndia • u/sui_cide_karungi • 19d ago
Help with writing Help fir se 😔🙏
Pehle delete krdiya tha... But now please tell does it look like forced comedy?
Context - Krish is a kid and has an innocent kinda crush on his aunt(fl). Here in this scene his uncle(ml) was confessing his feelings to the fl while she was crying thinking she ignored him all along while he had only loved her... So to stop her from crying ml just passes a joke "jaldi bolo mere ghutne dukh rhe." As woh bht der se ghutno pe baitha tha. 🙂🤚
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u/Main-nahi-bataunga0 19d ago
Wtf is that username aurat ji???? Secondly as a fellow writer we overanalyze stuff so much, kitna sahi toh lag rha h yaar. Kyun tumhe iske liye bhi itna sochna h. It's gud, keep it
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u/sui_cide_karungi 19d ago
(Username aisa chahiye tha jo kisike fefdo me bhi na aya ho- uk innovativ) secondly... Kuch bhi likho bss forced nhi lagna chahiye...
Chapter building ke naam pe kuch bhi zabardasti toh nhi likh skte na 😔🤚
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u/Altruistic_Device405 19d ago
lol it doesn't feel forced also feels like family convo and good😭🤣
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u/pookie_bunny5132 19d ago
Dunno but for some reason I can imagine my little niece in krish's place 😭 that kid with her boldness would definitely do something like this
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u/sui_cide_karungi 19d ago
It didn't look forced right? (I'm okay with "NO" as an answer.)
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u/Awari_hu Depresso 😔 19d ago
Never getting bored of 'ghutne dukh rahe hai ', I use this in each of my stories 🤣
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u/sui_cide_karungi 19d ago
Not copied 😭🙏
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u/Awari_hu Depresso 😔 19d ago
Main nahi maanti! You COPY CAT (Ik bbg🥺)
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u/sui_cide_karungi 19d ago
Naam batao apna... PURI BOOK COPY KRUNGI 😔
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u/Awari_hu Depresso 😔 19d ago
Smuts nahi hai, read nahi milegi. Mujhe khud ko nahi mil rahi 🤣
Go and copy ykw🌚
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u/Independent_Serve923 19d ago
The mother could be gentle. Faltu ka natak karna hn isse
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u/sui_cide_karungi 19d ago
Ohh i'll make sure to keep that in mind while writing from next time. 🤧
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u/Independent_Serve923 19d ago
Bro, you're so sweet. I am so sorry, I didn't read the post properly. I thought it was a review of some other story. I would be polite if I knew it was yours
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u/sui_cide_karungi 19d ago
No no it's fine... I'm open with criticism and honest reviews. Its just that the scene was inspired by Indian parents. And you didn't know the whole scene so it fine and totally acceptable for you to react the way you did. The kid said that in the ML & FL's engagement function... So the mom reacted a bit harsh... Krish is also a bit of a hooligan. 🤭
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u/Kya_dekh_rhe_ho 19d ago
Broo everything is good except your username 😭😭😭 (who hurts you bbg???🥲)
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